Response to Comments

I agree with many of the comments which Grete made on my research proposal.

For example, there was on paragraph which she said did not make sense where it was and she did not see the connection, and although I later connected it better to the proposal, I need to make it clearer where it initially is or move it all together. The person reading the proposal should not be confused about something until it is later mentioned.

Also, near the end of the paper there is a paragraph so vague that she could not understand what I was trying to say. This is an issue which I need to fix and I think that it may be possible that because it was the end of the paper I was sort of running everything together and just trying to put words in as a way to get to the end of the paper.

And, with the conclusion, she recommended that I tie it back to the paper even more than I already do. I agree with this because the conclusion is another part to reinforce what you want to do and in reality it is probably one of the things which people will most likely remember because it is what they read last.

I am going to work out all of the issues with the research proposal but overall I feel as if I had a good grasp on it, which is a good thing.